Hello, beautiful readers! The next two weeks are going to be a bit stressful for me. The marking period is coming to an end, so I have a ton of assignments I need to grade. I'm also working on a course I'm taking for renewing my teaching certificate. I'm also still celebrating my birthday with friend outings. And in between, I'm trying to fit in the gym, edit my novel, and write poetry. So, I'm prompt combining again.
For W3: Wea've Written Weekly, Sally encourages us to write a story in the form of a poem with fewer than 500 words.
For dVerse: Poets Pub, it's all about The Romance of the Open Window. Dora encourages us to give our take of the romance of an open window. One of my favorite paintings is Young Woman at a Window by Salvador Dalí. I fell in love with the painting during an art exhibit at a museum in Spain, so much so that I bought a copy of it and have it hanging in my house.
Over at Moonwashed Weekly Prompt, Eugi provides us with a picture and the poem below and encourages us to allow it to inspire us. I chose to use the word oblivious from the poem.
I decided to write a stacked/double Etheree. It felt like a great form to use to tell a story. A stacked/double Etheree combines two Etheree poems. The lines follow the syllable pattern of 1/2/3/4/5/6/7/8/9/10/10/9/8/7/6/5/4/3/2/1.
(Young Woman at a Window by Salvador Dalí)
Vicarious Life
she
leans there
quietly
window watching
creating stories
of strangers on sidewalks
passerby oblivious
as she weaves tales of romance
little boy plucking flowers for girl
young couple planning their future marriage
pregnant wife dreaming of husband's massage
old man hobbling home to wife
baker gives free croissant to crush
girl bats her eyes and blushes
lovers tenderly kiss
while she watches all
through her window
all alone
her love
gone
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This took my breath away. The form is so perfect for the story. The story itself is haunting. Great job. Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sally! I appreciate your kind words. :-)
DeleteYvette, I love how this flows so naturally while painting such vivid scenes. The contrast between connection and solitude feels especially poignant.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
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Thank you, David! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteDas ist wirklich ergreifend.... danke
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elise! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteOh.. that ending so sad (and terse with the fitting form)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bjorn! I didn't know the poem would go that way until the very end. :-)
DeleteWhat a sad irony, Yvette, that the open window gives glimpses of love and companionship, but the observer herself has been left alone. A deft use of the etheree form to surprise us with the end.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Dora! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteI love your poem, Yvette, with all of its tender moments!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Dwight! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteOh that is a sad ending, and the form works well for this poem as you say. Solitary to all that life and then back to one.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteI love this! 😊👏🏾❤️
ReplyDeleteWishing you the very best in the season of yours. May you come out ever brighter! 🫂
Thank you, FK! I appreciate your warm wishes. Right back at ya! :-)
DeleteSuch beautiful moments, too bad it takes that pain to see them.
ReplyDeleteMaybe it brings her comfort to see others enjoying what she once had. Thanks for stopping by. :-)
DeletePoignant and full of unspoken yearning.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Carol! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteSnap shots of a life. Something I think we all do at times and yet never so enough. Delicate writing. I love this.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Violet! I tend to be a people watcher and then create stories of their lives. I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteOh my gosh. What beauty you created Yvette. Gorgeous. Thank you. Xo Selma Martin
ReplyDeleteThank you, Selma! I appreciate your comment. :-)
DeleteI could imagine any one of them seeing her in her window and imagining what it might take to bring her happiness.
ReplyDeleteWouldn't it be lovely if they waved at her? Thanks for visiting, Ken! :-)
DeleteYvette, such a beautifully flowing poem. Your masterful double etheree captures tender moments and the twist at the end reels in the sad side of life. - Eugi
ReplyDeleteThank you, Eugi! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteBeautiful poem. The watcher sees brief happy snapshots. I wonder if the people's sad moments are played out in. public.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure there are. Maybe that will become another poem. Thanks for visiting, Cai! :-)
DeleteThis is so beautiful, and the sad ending took me by surprise. Wonderful writing, Yvette! 💕
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lauren! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteI often window watch and wonder at other people's lives, letting my imagination follow them home and eavesdropping on the thoughts that I put into their minds.
ReplyDeleteI do the same, Shaun! Thanks for sharing. :-)
DeleteA wistful poem! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Val! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteWatching others enjoying is also fun. Great poem, Yvette.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Indira! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteThis poem has a desperate loneliness about it. Beautifully done, Yvette. Robbie
ReplyDeleteThank you, Robbie! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteI enjoy people watching... and it is fun to make up stories about them.
ReplyDeleteThankfully I also have a life :)
So do I, Jules! Thanks for stopping by. :-)
DeleteYou combine the prompts amazingly Yvette, your poem captures so much in such a small space - and I feel I see and feel it all 💞Suzanne
ReplyDeleteThank you, Suzanne! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteYour poem touched my heart.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Heather! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteIt 's sad when imagination is your only friend. A touching poem Yvette.
ReplyDeleteYes, it is, Kerfe! Thanks for stopping by. :-)
DeleteThe etheree form worked really well here - the swell up with the fun imagining while people watching, but then the decline towards the revealed truth of the character's situation. Well written, Yvette!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Nicole! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteStunning piece, truly, and so well composed...
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ain! I appreciate your kind words. :-)
DeleteSuch a good job using all the prompts to create such a beautiful piece, Yvette!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susi! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
Deletehi, Yvette 😃
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David
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Thanks, David! I'll head on over to take a look. :-)
Deletehi, Yvette 😁
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