Tuesday, February 22, 2022

#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 262 #THEMEPROMPT @SyllabicPoetry @ColleenChesebro #Diatelle #Haiku #Transitions


Hello, beautiful readers! Today, Colleen Chesebro challenged us to write a syllabic poem using the theme of transitions. She also shared a couple of poetry forms to try. One of those is the Diatelle. This form has the syllabic structure of 1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1. And if that isn't complicated enough, it uses a rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. You can read more about it here

Now, I'm not a big fan of rhymes, but I'm a sucker for challenges. So, here is my attempt a creating a Diatelle. Since the theme is transitions, I decided to think of the day my son graduates from high school or college and what message I'd want to give him. I hope you like it.


son

today

find your way

don't hesitate

the future's yours to slay

you've proven you're one of the great

you pushed through your doubt to decide your fate

commencement's done and now your future has begun

remember failures that made you irate

but those moments couldn't dictate

the success you'd display

dream, work, create

'till you may

convey

done

 

A few of those lines almost made me give up, especially that last line. Trying to find a one-syllable word to rhyme with son that still fits the message was not easy. Graduation is such an important transition in life. I still have a couple of years before my son is walking across that stage and receiving his diploma, but I'm already so proud of all he's achieved. :-)

I almost ended there, but another poem came to me as I was walking away from the computer, so I figured I'd add this little bonus. There are so many transitions in life, so I wanted to honor another one. This time, I wrote a senryu with a 5/7/5 syllabic pattern (or at least, I think I did). 


my earthly life's done

see you on the other side

celebrate today


If you'd like to join in the fun, check out Colleen's post here.

23 comments:

  1. Wow, Yvette, I'm in awe of your skill. I love both poems. 💗

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    1. Aw, Gwen! I am honored by your comment. Thank you! :-)

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  2. You definitely arose to the challenge, Yvette. And what a beautiful transition to choose for both poems. It's bittersweet when they walk across the stage and you can only hope you've done your best. Great job!

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    1. I will be bawling like a baby when my son crosses that stage, for sure. I'm happy you enjoyed both poems, Jan. Thanks for sharing that with me. :-)

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  3. Well done! That one feels challenging. You handled it well.🙂

    Pat

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    1. Thank you, Pat! It was definitely a challenge. Syllables can be difficult on their own, and adding rhyme to it just makes it harder, but my brain enjoyed firing up the synapses for it. ;-)

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  4. You have no idea how much those words mean to me, Colleen! Thank you. I'm such a fan of imagery, but it just wasn't coming to me, so I decided to just write from the heart. I guess it worked. Lol! With the second one, I originally said it was a haiku, but then I remembered the senryu. Then, I wasn't sure which it was since the poem could technically be referring to a season in life. I thought I might be stretching it with that interpretation, so I went with the senryu. I'm overthinking it, I'm sure, but that's what I do. ;-)

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  5. Amazing work,Yvette! Thanks so much for sharing. :)

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  6. That is a tricky form that diatelle. Good for you. And I really like the senryu that it loosened and shook out!

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    1. Thanks, D. I appreciate you sharing that with me. :-)

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  7. It will be here before you know it! These are good words to give him.

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  8. Hi Yvette, these are both lovely and well done.

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  9. So much of what you wrote made me think of my own graduations, and those of my children. Our eldest grand is moving up to Middle School next year - And it will be a long while before we see our new great-nephews graduate. :)



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    1. I teach at a middle school, Jules. It's such an interesting time in a child's life. My son is in high school, so graduation is just a couple of years away. :-)

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  10. After such a lovely poem, I was definitely not expecting a bonus, Yvette! I like how the second poem has such a happy tone to it...

    Yours,
    David [ben Alexander]

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    1. Thanks, David. I'm a big fan of celebrating life, even at the transition of death. I'm happy you liked the poems. :-)

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  11. I loved them both. Those diatelle poems are a huge challenge that you did so well.

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    1. Thank you, Denise. A few lines definitely had me wanting to pull my hair out at times. Lol! :-)

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  12. wonderful diatelle. touching. and that last senryu is quite mysterious.
    -Jude-

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    1. I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me, Jude. :-)

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