Tuesday, January 25, 2022

#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 258, #THEMEPROMPT @SyllabicPoetry @ColleenChesebro #tanka #sweetsour

Hello, beautiful readers! Today, Colleen Chesebro's Tanka Tuesday challenge is focusing on the theme, Memories: Sweet & Sour. The first thing that came to my mind was a relationship gone wrong, so I wrote this tanka. For those of you who are learning with me, a tanka has five lines with a 5 7 5 7 7 syllabic pattern. The third line sometimes has a pivot that applies both to the first two lines and the last two lines. I hope you like it. :-)

A whirlwind of love

Promises of forever

Our perfect romance

Shattered by your betrayal

Now broken-hearted strangers


I'd love to hear your thoughts on my sweet & sour poem. If you want to join in on the fun, check out Colleen's posts here. :-)

14 comments:

  1. Beautiful and vivid imagery. Well done, Yvette!

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  2. I belive we have all fallen in that trap -
    And that most of us are lucky enough to get out of it too!

    (Jules from WP and Tanka Tuesday)

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  3. "Broken-hearted strangers" -- powerful image, Yvette. Well done! 💘

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  4. Ouch! That is the perfect scenario of sweet and very sour. Well-done, Yvette!

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    1. Thanks, Jan! It definitely felt right for this theme. :-)

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  5. Now you're just somebody that I used to love: remember this song? Your poem reminded me of this. Perfect! thanks for sharing. xoxo

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    1. I love that song, Selma! And you're right. It fits perfectly with this poem. Thanks for commenting today. :-)

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  6. Awww, this is heartbreaking, Yvette!

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  7. "Nothing ventured, nothing gained" may sound trite, but true love is something that is "all in," with the assumption that it's reciprocal. But then, we never see it coming.

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    1. So true, Ken. You cannot experience deep love without allowing yourself to be vulnerable and risking the pain that may come. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts. :-)

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