Hello, beautiful readers! Colleen Chesebro's Tanka Tuesday challenge this week has us exploring Ekphrastic poetry. When I taught high school, I would use pictures to inspire the students to write all the time, but I never knew it was called this. Today's challenge was inspired by a painting by John William Waterhouse.
When I first saw this painting, it made me think of Valerie, a character from my Chronicle of the Diasodz series. Valerie's hair is brown and straight and the time period is wrong, but the way this woman peers into the crystal ball reminded me of the prophecy Valerie was given when she found out she was pregnant.
So, here is my attempt at writing a haibun. If this is your first visit with me, I should warn you that I am a novice at syllabic poetry. Each week, Colleen challenges us to try new forms. So, if I don't quite write a poem that follows the rules, consider it a learning experience for me. You cannot grow if you do not try. So, I hope you enjoy my response to this week's prompt:
Prophetic Sacrifice
She stared at the globe, where the most likely of many possible futures dissipated into the mist. A tear streamed down her cheek as she cradled her growing bump. The prophecy asked too much of her. She knew what she had to do, but she questioned whether she had the strength to do so.
beautiful unborn
must I make this
sacrifice?
our fates
intertwine
I hope you enjoyed that. I'd love to hear your thoughts below. If I've inspired you to join in the fun, click here to follow Colleen's challenges. :-)
I'd say your first attempt was excellent, Yvette! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mark! I appreciate the compliment. :-)
DeleteThere's an entire book in those words. Very evocative. (K)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kerfe. It's actually an entire series. ;-) I'm happy you enjoyed it. :-)
DeleteA pregnant lady, I didn't see it! Lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteI'm happy to share a different perspective with you, Elizabeth. Thanks for stopping by. :-)
DeleteBeautiful, Yvette! Halibuns are one of my favorites to write of the symbolic poetry. A lot can be expressed in those few words and you did just that so well!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Denise! I have read several of yours and loved them. They are what inspired me to give it a try with this painting. :-)
DeleteLovely, Yvette, and perfect! You've brought reverence and tenderness to the painting. 💗
ReplyDeleteAw, thanks, Gwen! I appreciate you sharing that with me. :-)
DeleteWow, Yvette! That is so beautiful. No one else noticed the bump, but when you wrote it, I saw it. A fantastic response to the prompt! Kudos to you!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jan. Since I have an oracle in my series, the crystal ball made me think of her. Then, I saw Valerie's pregnancy dilemma when I saw the little bump in the dress. I'm happy you liked it. :-)
DeleteAh... yes I thought she might be pregnant... But I once made an error when I thought someone was and they were not... so I never guess anymore!
ReplyDeleteThere are many stories that spring from the birth of expected or unexpected encounters... ;)
(Jules from WP.Thanks for stopping by my shadorma)
Haha...yes, I never assume with a real human, but paintings seem safer for assumptions. ;-) Thanks for stopping by and making me laugh, Jules. (and you're welcome) :-)
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DeleteI did enjoy that! What a great hook, Yvette, into a longer story. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Diana! I'm happy you liked it. :-)
DeleteI absolutely do NOT mind, Colleen! I appreciate you helping me learn and grow, and your example is fabulous! I love it!
ReplyDeleteI knew my three lines weren't a true haiku because it didn't focus on nature. I now better understand that the haiku/senryu part shouldn't be a continuation of the prose but something separate and yet connected somehow. Can a haibun have a senryu, or is it always a haiku that follows?
There's intrigue. You may have to continue the story.
ReplyDeleteI smiled at your intro, you show a healthy growth mind set.
Thank you, D. I actually pulled a character from my fantasy series for this poem. This moment in her life was the catalyst for the entire series. :-)
DeleteThis Haibun is intriguing and beautiful. I enjoyed it much. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your enjoyment with me. I truly appreciate it. :-)
DeleteIt's a beautiful haibun. Mysterious and intriguing.
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Thank you, Jude! I'm happy you like it. :-)
DeleteHow lovely, Yvette. Perfect words that send the mind wandering. Love.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Selma! I'm happy you enjoyed it. :-)
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