Hello, beautiful readers! I am starting to see the light at the end of the tunnel in my renovations. It looks like my kitchen will finally get installed tomorrow or Friday. Fingers crossed! It's been a busy day and tomorrow is looking even busier, so I'm going to try to combine three different prompts into one poem today.
The first comes from dVerse's Poets Pub. Lillian invites us to use the name from the list of candies that she provides here within our poem. I'm not a big candy/bar person, though I do love dark chocolate. For my poem, I decided to use starburst as my word.
The second challenge is Sadje's What Do You See? prompt. The photo below is one of the two she provided to inspire us to write. And the third challenge is W3: Wea've Written Weekly. Lesley gives us the option of writing about a desert island or a fantasy castle. I've twisted this a bit to a deserted island of ice, rather than a desert of sand.
I decided to write an Etheree, which is a poem of ten lines with a syllabication pattern of 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10.
(image courtesy of Colin Watts @ Unsplash)
you
left me
deserted
my heart broken
shattered pieces formed
protective icy shards
prevented new encounters
with time, the heart began to mend
starbursts of warmth, self-love melted walls
and I found a new love to call my own
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That starburst of warmth ... the best medicine ever! Cheers.
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DeleteLovely poem.
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DeleteThis is just beautifully done Yvette. Love how you’ve combined the challenges and written such a moving poem. Thanks for joining in my friend.
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DeleteNicely written etheree 👏
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DeleteBeautifully Done.
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DeleteAbsolutely beautiful. One thing I noticed.....the shape of the poem. At first, dependent on this other who shatters her/him; leaves them deserted; cold (icy shards) and then as the shape of the poem expands, the person opens themselves, gains confidence, gains a sense of self without the debilitating other. And as the poem ends, at its widest point, the statements of affirmation. Beautifully done!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lillian! I appreciate your comment. Self-love helps us open up to others. :-)
DeleteI bet you’ll be so happy to have a new kitchen, Yvette! I enjoyed the sweet prompt combo etheree you cooked up. I especially love the ‘starbursts of warmth’.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kim! I will beyond happy to have it finished and not have to deal with strangers in my house. Lol! Thanks for stopping by! :-)
DeleteYvette - the structure of your presentation beautifully mirrors the emotional journey from heartbreak to healing. The ice metaphor flows perfectly through self-protection to warm renewal - truly moving and skilfully crafted poetry.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bob Lynn! I appreciate your kind words. :-)
DeleteI like the term "starbursts of warmth."
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DeleteNice one
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Much♡love
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Delete"starbursts of warmth" is so lovely, Yvette!
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DeleteLove the form and the image of shattered ice and reformed heart! Bravo!
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DeleteVery well done Yvette. I love the form you chose 🥰
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DeleteBeautiful poem. The etheree form expresses the emerging grief leading finally to happiness.
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DeleteWell done, Yvette!
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DeleteI like the theme of your poem, how the narrator comes to understand the importance of loving oneself.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Heather! I wish we, as a society, did a better job of teaching our children this important concept. Thank you for visiting! :-)
DeleteYvette, I really appreciate the gentle rise and release in this piece—it feels quietly triumphant. That last line lands with soft certainty.
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DeleteChilling and sort of sad
ReplyDeleteHeartbreak has a sadness to it, for sure. Thank you for stopping by, Christine! :-)
DeleteIt’s wonderful how you combined the three prompts. The Etheree delivered! Wonderful, Yvette. Blessings, Selma
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DeleteBrilliantly written for the three prompts, Yvette. I love your icy desert island — thank you so much for this poem 🧊🙏
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DeleteSuch a gentle blend of the prompts I would never even have noticed if you had not mentioned it. Brava! Yvette.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Violet! I am happy it felt seamless. Lol! Thank you for stopping by. :-)
DeleteYes to the poem, well said Yvette and clever too as a combo.
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DeleteSo relatable! I think just about everyone has their heart smashed to bits, only to have to rebuild for the next. I loved this line - "protective icy shards" Yes, we certainly do build those within. Great joy, Yvette!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susi! I appreciate you sharing your thoughts. :-)
DeleteIt is an important lesson to learn to love ourselves first so that we can then love others. I remember those broken High School and College romances....
ReplyDeleteWe do like to protect ourselves. But if we freeze too much it becomes harder to thaw. Nice Etheree.
High school heartache was the worst! Lol! Thanks for sharing and stopping by, Jules! :-)
Deletehi, Yvette 💗
ReplyDeleteJust wanna let you know that this week's W3, hosted by our amazing Dennis, is now live:
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David
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Thank you, David! I'll go take a look. :-)
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