Hello, beautiful readers! For this week's #TankaTuesday Weekly Poetry Challenge, Colleen Chesebro invites us to use the following painting by Ferdinand Georg Waldmüller to inspire us. It's called The Expected One, so even though the eye is first drawn to the young lady on the path, I believe the focus is on the young man, dressed to the nines, awaiting the girl.
To me, she seems so sad, and he seems quite nervous, which made me wonder... what did he do? 😂 So, I wrote a tanka and a haiku. A tanka has five lines with a 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic pattern, and a haiku has three lines with a 5-7-5 syllabic pattern.
how to make amends
a simply apology
won't mend her hurt heart
perhaps true remorse will work
he prays she will forgive him
carnation in hand
humility seeks pardon
rosebuds bloom again
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I love this , you saw it from a completely different side to me...very clever 💜
ReplyDeleteThank you, Willow! Your poem was great as well. I love how we all interpret it a little differently. :-)
DeleteAwww, this is so sweet. Hope she accepts the apology!
ReplyDeleteAs do I, Jan! Lol! Thanks for visiting! :-)
DeleteOh well done, Yvi. I love how we all can see different attitudes in the couple.
ReplyDeleteI love that, too, Colleen! Thanks for visiting! :-)
DeleteLove this Yvette 💞 (AJ)
ReplyDeleteI'm so happy you do, Angela! I appreciate you sharing! :-)
DeleteBeautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elizabeth! :-)
DeleteYvette, I like the spin you put on the image and how hope permeates your poems.
ReplyDeleteWe always have to have hope, right? ;-) Thanks for sharing, Jade! :-)
DeleteGreat! Love how you saw a carnation there.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Reena! I'm happy you liked it. :-)
DeleteI like your tanka and haiku :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lady Lee! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteThis is such an interesting perspective! He's so immature, though (that rose in his hat) hahaha, so I hope she doesn't forgive him. UNLESS the prayerbook and rosary are meant to indicate that she is a FORGIVING person! I am starting to think about this painting way too much!
ReplyDeleteYou and me both, Luanne! So many different perspectives were taken with this painting. I love it! Thanks for visiting and sharing your thoughts. :-)
DeleteAwww...this is so sweet. Lovely write.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I appreciate you visiting and commenting. :-)
DeleteYour story works well with the painting. So much conveyed in a few words.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kerfe! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteA lovely poem, Yvette. I enjoy the way you share what you saw in the artwork and how that informed your interpretion. Hopefully there's forgiveness in the end for these two. Hugs.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Diana! I have no doubt all ended well. ;-)
Delete(Jules) On bended knee with flowers... I hope she forgives him :)
ReplyDeleteI'm sure she did. ;-) Thanks for visiting, Jules! :-)
DeleteYve, I like how you shifted things for him. I think that ‘mothers of boys’ do this instinctively— that’s what ‘Selma’ would have done (I know, I know). Boys grow into themselves later than girls do. *Nodding* they need lots of practice.
ReplyDeleteI’m so happy at how you wrote this. Thanks so much. A delight to read. Xoxo, Selma (cannot change the anonymous part when I reply from phone)
Thank you, Selma! Yes, mothers of boys do see things differently. Thanks for sharing and visiting! :-)
DeleteI love how you saw this painting, and it really fits so well! 🌸
ReplyDeleteThank you, Merril! I'm so happy you enjoyed it. :-)
DeleteOoh. Now that you mention it, he does look apologetic - I hope the situation turns out well for them! It's nice to see a different take on the painting :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! I'm sure she forgave him. ;-) I appreciate you stopping by! :-)
DeleteLovely poem, Yvette.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Robbie! I'm happy you liked it. :-)
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