Hello, beautiful readers! I'm back online after taking some time off to focus on my wants and needs. I experienced several revelations, all of which were good. Since returning, I've been focused on my health, both physically and mentally. That's taking some of the time I used for writing, but it's all about balance, and my health needs to be part of the equation. So, today is my first day with time to write poetry, and I've chosen to combine two prompts.
The first is an image from Sadje's What Do You See? prompt, which works perfectly for the Wea've Written Weekly (W3) prompt. In the W3 prompt, Lisa Paul invites us to write a Quadrille, a 44-word poem, about transitions - beginnings and endings.
(image credit; Egor Myznik @ Unsplash)
The Breakup
it was never going to last
you and I
dreams of a future
seen through a foggy window
never clearly showing a path forward
the exhaustion of trying
seeped into our bones
both realizing
we couldn't fulfill the other's needs
a bittersweet final goodbye
Would you like to write a poem for either of these prompts? Join us here:
I’m glad that the break did you good dear friend. One should put personal needs first and be good to oneself. Thanks for joining in with this very lovely poem. The stress of making a relationship work is too much if there is no compatibility. Lots of love
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Thank you, Sadje! My time away wasn't about a breakup, but I agree with your thoughts. I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteYvette, welcome back! 🌿 I’m glad you’ve been taking care of yourself. That “bittersweet final goodbye” really comes through in your quadrille.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
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Thank you, David! That picture just screams breakup to me, so I went with it. I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteKudos to you for taking time for rejuvenation of the mind, body, spirit. We all need that. Love the poem. You did a great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jan! I appreciate your support. :-)
DeleteYvette, I think your quadrille captures the slow erosion of a relationship with stark honesty. Both "seen through a foggy window" and "exhaustion of trying" convey relationship fatigue without melodrama. I thought the shift to both realising the reality made the final bittersweet goodbye feel earned rather than sentimental.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your thoughtful comment! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteMasterful, Yvette!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Nolcha! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteBeautiful how you fit such few words to tell about the break up inevitability. Not all relationships are made to last. Thanks for sharing, Yvette. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteNo, they are not. Thanks for visiting, Selma! :-)
DeleteAnonymous is Selma 🙄
ReplyDeleteThe exhaustion of trying I can relate to. Excellent poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rall! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteA poem- as well as a slice of life I think most can connect with. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Violet! I appreciate you visiting! :-)
DeleteSometimes the goodbye is the best thing! Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteI agree, Elizabeth! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteA beautiful and sad poem. Sometimes the breaking up helps us to be a better person. Ironically so.
ReplyDeleteGeeta
I agree, Geeta! Thanks for visiting! :-)
DeleteI love your take, Yvette! Beautifully expressed.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Thank you for visiting! :-)
DeleteThis is making me comment as anonymous, but this is Lisa Paul. I love your poem, it is bittersweet and lovely. I loved your line, "the exhaustion of trying seeped into our bones." Wow, that is so perfect.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lisa! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteGreat write for the picture. 👏 I've been missing Sadje's prompts recently, busy with other things.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Shaun! I'm missing prompts here and there as well. It's all good. Join whenever you can. :-)
DeleteA scene as old as coffee shops! We've all been there! Nicely done, Yvette!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susi! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteI had two similar 'break-ups'...
ReplyDeleteAnd I know about self care too. I've had some 'girlfriend' relationship issues. Which is one of the reasons I am so far behind and haven't written for 'our story' yet. I hope to get to it this week sometime.
Be well and stay healthy! (((Hugs)))
I've dealt with that as well. Self-care has to come first. The story will be ready when it's ready. No worries! :-)
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