Hello, beautiful readers! For this week's dVerse: Poets Pub, Grace introduces us to Complaint, A Poem of Lament. A complaint poem "is a poem that laments or protests unrequited love or tells of personal misfortune, misery, or injustice." Grace encourages us to write a complaint poem using William Dunbar's form which has the following properties:
- stanzaic, written in any number of quatrains
- metered, often iambic or trochaic tetrameter
- rhymed, rhyme scheme: aabB ccbB ddbB etc. (B being a refrain)
I struggled a bit with this one. There are so many injustices that it took me a while to settle on which one to choose.
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be studious, they always say
they can't take your degrees away
what good is it if the pay's crap
hard work just doesn't bridge the gap
put in extra hours, show you care
prove your work ethic's very rare
do all you're asked until you snap
hard work just doesn't bridge the gap
misogynists control the game
revolt about making pay same
good luck making glass ceiling snap
hard work just doesn't bridge the gap
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ugh! I felt the frustration in this... or was it my frustration?
ReplyDeleteI think most women can connect with this sentiment. Thanks for stopping by, FK! :-)
DeleteI know what you mean, hard work for someone else benefit, just does not bridge the gap. Love the clever title too. Thanks for joining in.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Grace! I appreciate you visiting.
DeleteA sincere and heartfelt complaint. Well-done!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jan! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteVery well-said! A worthy complaint! Sadly, the glass ceiling is still intact and we still battle to bridge the gap.
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, MM! One day... Thanks for stopping by. :-)
Deletewow, yvette! you nailed it. i didn't even attempt to make mine rhyme. very well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Pink! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteI admire your positivity in the face of a mountain of obstacles. Power and gender divides people.
ReplyDeleteSadly, they do, Cai! Thanks for visiting. :-)
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ReplyDeleteThank you, Reena! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteNice write Yvette. I agree with your complaint!
ReplyDeleteThe last stanza feels a little awkward for me, as you are trying to stick to the eight syllables. Maybe 'misogynists control the game' flows a little better?
You're right! Thanks for the suggestion, Shaun. I love it! :-)
DeleteI agree, Yvette - I love your poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Nolcha! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteAlas... it seems nothing moves the needle... though I think my wife has done very very well (and she is a lot smarter than me)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bjorn! Most teachers I know are working more than one job. It's crazy! Thanks for visiting. :-)
DeleteAbsolutely spot on. Fantastic poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rall! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteFrustration seeps through every line, Yvette, and you use the form deftly to convey it.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Dora! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteHi Yvette, I couldn't agree with you more. An excellent and heartfelt poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Robbie! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteThis is a real scenario in the corporate world and very frustrating . Well done Yvette - Michelle (Poetry By Mich)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Michelle! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteAn unexpected but altogether to the point lament, Yvette...
ReplyDeleteThank you, Andrew! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteCrushing...yes...the hamster wheel......
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ain! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteCompletely agree with this lament.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sara! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteI strongly feel the frustration in your words, Yvette, and I agree. 💞
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lauren! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteI agree... sometimes all our 'edcation' ends up sidelined because of the only jobs available and the bills that must be paid. *sigh* -
ReplyDeleteHope you are able to still enjoy teaching and learning!
I love teaching, despite the pay. Thanks for visiting, Jules! :-)
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