Hello, beautiful readers! For this week's #Tanka Tuesday 24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge, Colleen Chesebro provided us with three phrases and encouraged us to create different poems using the phrases. The phrases are:
smoldering heat
midsummer darkness
cutting the grass
I decided to challenge myself a bit this week and tried out a couple of new poetry forms. For the first phrase, I used the American Cinquain, which I've done before. It is a poem of five lines with a syllabic pattern of 2-4-6-8-2. The first four lines should build drama, and the fifth line changes the focus.
For the second poem, I attempted a seox, which has six lines (a hexastich) with a 3-7-6-5-4-3 syllabic pattern. And for the last poem, I tried writing a dodoitsu, which has a syllabic pattern of 7-7-7-5. It usually focuses on love, humor, or the unexpected but can also focus on nature and beauty. Hopefully, I did right by these forms. As always, I've bolded and italicized the kigo words.
(courtesy of @aghostmaycome on Pixabay)
summer
smoldering heat
sizzling sidewalks burn feet
humidity suffocates me
ah, pool!
(courtesy of @Schaferle2 on Pixabay)
sunny day
midsummer darkness rolls in
lightning bursts streak through sky
thunder makes music
rain adds drum beats
stunning show
blades stick to their sweaty skin
while I relish the a/c
the joys of summer
Would you like to create a poem with one (or all) of these phrases? Join us here.
Both the aspects of summer have been beautifully captured. I liked all three forms too.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Balroop! I appreciate your visit. :-)
DeleteLiked all these forms. Well done !...Rall
ReplyDeleteThanks, Rall! :-)
DeleteWonderful imagery, Yvette. Your lines are amazing -- "rain adds drum beats" - beautiful visual capture of summer rain! Bravo! 🌞
ReplyDeleteThank you, Gwen! I'm so happy you like them. :-)
DeletePerfect!☺️
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting! :-)
DeleteBeautifully done, Yvette.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Mark! I appreciate you stopping by. :-)
DeleteFabulous work on the three different forms, Yvi. We all seem to have a trend going about NOT wanting to cut the grass. LOL!! 😂
ReplyDeleteAs a child, I was lucky that my dad felt that was his job. As an adult, I used to do it until I injured my rotator cuff. Then, I hired a company to do it. I don't miss the job one bit. LOL! Thanks for visiting! :-)
Deletelove your poems :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lady Lee! I appreciate you visiting. :-)
DeleteI love the music of the storm in the third.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Melissa! I love the sound of rainstorms. Thanks for passing by. :-)
DeleteYvette, love the forms and how you used them. All vivid images of midsummer.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lisa! I appreciate you coming by and commenting. :-)
Delete(Jules) I should use my gym pool more...
ReplyDeleteWe finally had to mow the front - just for a good look - the back hasn't been mowed for weeks. Though we are getting some rain today.
We did have some thunder last night... I enjoy watching lightng :)
I'm a fan of thunderstorms as long as I can stay indoors. Thanks for sharing, Jules! :-)
DeleteHI Yvette, I hope you are well and enjoying the summer. Compelling verses.
ReplyDeleteI'm squeezing as much enjoyment out of summer before I have to return to work next week. Lol! Thanks for stopping by, Robbie! :-)
DeleteI love all of these, Yvette... And I feel like I could have written that last one myself - I definitely love the AC and hate mowing grass!
ReplyDeleteYou've rendered the imagery perfectly...
Much love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
Aw, thank you, David! I truly appreciate that compliment. Thanks for visiting! :-)
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